Chapter 5.2 – Revealing Secrets

Authors note: Please be mindful that this chapter is dark, and shouldn’t be taken lightly. If your easily offended, please don’t read it!

Two warnings in a row? Jeesh… I promise some good will come eventually.

Makenzie’s Point of View

“NO! Just leave me alone. I don’t want to talk to anyone!” I screamed through my tears. They were so freaking persistent! Why couldn’t they just go away and leave me alone?!

“Micki open this door right now!” Dad shouted, giving the door another pound.


I grabbed my back pack and emptied it onto the floor, throwing clothes from my dresser into it. This was it, I was running away. I couldn’t take this life any longer! My nightmares, my “friends” … I just had ENOUGH! If I run away from my problems, maybe they’ll leave me alone for good.

As I was emptying another drawer, it hit me. What am I doing? How is running going to solve anything?

I let some more tears slid down my cheeks, and then let out a deep breath. I just couldn’t do this to myself. I was already a complete wreck. Why run from the only safe place I knew? That was just my anger and frustration talking. Inside I wanted to crawl up on my daddy’s lap and ask him to make it all go away!

“Please Makenzie. We just want you to tell us what’s wrong! We’re not leaving until you unlock this door.” Papa demanded, worry filling his voice.

I braced myself, then unlocked my bedroom door. My parents were standing beyond it with petrified looks on their faces. I guess I couldn’t really blame them. I would be afraid too if I had a kid and she pulled a stunt like that.

The second I stepped out of that room, I collapsed into my dad’s arms. I cried uncontrollably into his shoulder begging him to take away the pain.

“Pl-Please don’t let him hurt me!” I wailed, clenching tighter onto his shirt.

He pulled me back, and looked me directly in the eyes “Who hurt you?”

“Jeremy.” And from there, I told them everything. The nightmares, the way I felt when my sisters were taken from me,  the constant bullying in school, and the fact that Jeremy almost successfully raped me. Their faces said 1000 words. They couldn’t believe everything I was hiding from them, and honestly they were hurt. I felt so bad for making them feel bad! UGH! Why is everything so difficult?! Why can’t my life just be rainbows and unicorns?! 


Days turned into weeks and weeks turned into months. I continued going to school, and told my parents to just drop everything that happened. I didn’t want to bring Jeremy to the police, and I sure as heck didn’t want them talking to him. I just wanted him to leave me alone, and for life to go on as “normal.” But you see? After that night Jeremy didn’t return to school. In fact, I haven’t even heard his name mentioned since.

I know it was weird, but I actually was… worried for him.

“Come on Mick! We’re going to be late for class… AGAIN!” Kim growled, demanding I follow her. I lowered my head even further, and tightened the grip I had around myself.

You go…”

“Oh my god, we’re not doing this again Makenzie! Stop moping about Jeremy! I told you he probably switched schools, or moved. GET OVER IT!” She shouted, her voice echoing down the empty halls.

I turned from her and scoffed. “Just leave me alone…”

“Mick, where are you going!? You need to stop acting like this!  You lose friends and you gain friends. I’ve had to accept that in my life, and so do you.”

“Your a selfish jerk! How could you stand there and say things about him like that? It didn’t bother you the least that after that night he just, disappeared?! What if he’s hurt?” I snapped back, my anger at it’s peak.


“Just save it, Kim. I don’t want to hear it.”

I didn’t understand why I had this need to defend him. It didn’t make sense to me at all! He raped me, and all I could think about was his safety? Where is my BRAIN?!

I walked into class late -as usual- and was given a dirty glare from the teacher. I slipped into the back row, and took a seat. Kim followed suit. She pulled a chair up beside me, and sighed “I do think about him. I don’t want to admit it… because I hate him for what he did to you. Just answer me this, Mick… Why do you care so much?”

I kept my eyes glued on my hands, and shrugged my shoulders. Honestly that was the same answer in my head. I had no idea why I cared… I just did.

Kim was going to say something else, but she was shushed by our science teacher. Thank god for that, because I was so done talking about this.


After school, I took a walk to my usual place. Jeremy, Kim, and I would come here to talk about life, and get away from our problems. After what he did to me this place became a thing of the past. Kim and I continued to see each other now and again, but it just wasn’t the same. I couldn’t resist coming here today though. It was just one of those times where I needed a time to escape from everything else around me.

Why did you have to mess everything up?! I whispered in a scowl under my breathEverything was fine until you did that to me… why did you do that to me Jeremy?”

“If it means anything, I didn’t know what I was doing… when I did it.” A voice that sounded all too familiar came from my behind my head. The hairs on my arm stood up and my skin crawled with goosebumps.


I sat there motionless, just waiting for his next move. I was scared and angry all at the same time. How dare he come here!

When he finally walked around the bench, and our eyes met, that’s when all hell broke loose! I thought that if I saw him again I would be relieved he was alive. Nope. Total opposite! I wanted him to die where he stood!!

“YOU JERK! Get away from me, before I call the cops!” I raged, my voice filling the air around us. He was lucky we were on the outskirts of the island, because people would have been turning heads.

“Makenzie please! Let me explain!” he quivered, his eyes glazing over.

Tears started pouring from his eyes, leaving me speechless where I stood. I wanted to continue to yell, but seeing him cry… it caught me completely off guard. What kind of rapist would cry? True criminals got a sense of thrill from their crimes… not break down and cry about them. What? I’ve seen a lot of crime shows.

“Explain what Jeremy? How you didn’t mean to rape me?!”

At the very sound of the word rape, his eyes just filled with more tears. “Micki… I- I didn’t know what I was doing. Even after I woke up the next morning, I found out what I did by someone who saw us in the hallway. He thought we we’re just being frisky, but as he started to describe everything to me, I almost threw up. It just brought back everything I wanted to forget.”

“Yea I’d want to forget if I raped someone too…” I snapped back, keeping at a safe distance. I still didn’t trust him. He wasn’t making any sense.

“I’m not talking about that night Makenzie! I’m talking about when I was young… what really happened to me.” he sighed, letting another tear escape his eye.

“Your not making any sense Jeremy! I met your parents, you have a great life.”

“Yea, except that their not my real parents.” he sniffled “This is something I should have told you along time ago.”


“No. Just let me finish!” he retorted, his eyes filled with shame.

My eyes widened with anticipation. I had no idea what he was going to tell me, but I had a feeling it wasn’t anything good.

“Before I was adopted, and before I had what seemed like the “perfect life” I had another family- My real family. A mom, dad, and older sister. I remember how much my sister – Lissy – loved me. She was so proud to have me as a little brother, because for the longest time she was an only child. My parents couldn’t have anymore kids, or so they were told, but out of no where… came me. It was safe to say we were really happy.”

“I remember the last happy day in my life, also turned into the beginning of the life I grew to hate- No, LOATHE. I was sitting on the couch with my sister watching afternoon cartoons. Outside was cold and rainy, and my father was at work.”

“We were in the middle of discussing which cartoon was better, when our father stormed inside the house. We turned around and both watched as he began to break down. Muffled cries were coming through his hands, and after awhile of hearing the same thing repeated over and over, we got the gist that our mother had died in a car accident. He was informed at work, and came straight home after the news. That was also the day my fathers heart turned black, and he no longer cared about what he did or said.”

“The days that passed only seemed to grow worse. It started out where he would snap at us for every little thing, no matter what it was. He turned to Lissy the most because she was 15 and I was only 5.  He would scream and shout, and half the time I expected him to hit us.”

“I wish I could say that, that was the worst part but it wasn’t. He also took up drinking, and that’s when our lives became a living hell. Any time he picked up a glass of alcohol, fear would strike through my entire body. I remember every time, right before he took the first sip, he would start to cry. It was like he resented the very thought of doing it to himself, but he did it anyways.”

“Th-the drinking went on for months. There wasn’t a day that went by where my father wasn’t drunk. Always screaming, always threatening me and my sister. His mind was so in cased by alcohol that he started doing things. Bad things. He-He-He would make me watch as he… had sex with women. He told me it was the only way to make me a man! That if I didn’t learn I would be someone else’s toy. I would sit there and cry, with my eyes closed tight. Anytime he saw them closed he would scream at me, and threaten to hurt me. I could never forget that laugh he would use when he got pleasure from torturing us. The worse part about it, was the women he was with couldn’t give a crap about me there, because they were either drunk or high as a kite.”

“Then-then that one unforgettable day came. My father was about to drag me into the room, and sit me in that god-forsaken chair and make me wait for his whore to come over. But my sister, she had enough! My father had me by the wrist, and she stepped in front of the bedroom door, refusing that he make me go through that again! By now he was screaming for her to move, and his grip only got tighter. Being the young age I was I started to break down and cry. That’s when he slapped me across the face, and his ring on his finger gave me this scar I now have.”

“I fell back onto the floor, and my father gripped my sister’s pony tail and started punching her repeatedly in the face. The rubber band in her hair came out, causing his next swing to knock her to the floor. I was screaming and crying, wanting him to stop hurting her!”

“Even when she was down, he gripped her by the throat and kept hitting her! I was so scared for Lissy so I climbed to my feet, and pleaded for him to stop! Her whole face was covered in scrapes and cuts, and tears were streaming down her cheek. I could see she was trying to tell me to go, but I just couldn’t leave her. She was the only real mother I had now.”

“He dropped the hold on my sister, because my screams just kept getting louder and louder. He turned to me and with a scowl on his face he told me to get in my chair, that this was a show I didn’t want to miss. I watched as he picked up my sister and plopped her onto the bed in the other room. The only thought that ran through my mind was that he was going to do that to her! That she was going to be his next…”

“I forced myself into that chair, and watched as he stripped my sister down to nothing but her underwear. She was blacked out for a good 10 minutes until she finally came around. He smirked, and made her pose for him. Saying that he wanted this done right for me. My sisters eyes were yet again filled with tears, her face dripping with blood. My father started to undress and then slowly started climbing onto the bed. My sister eyeballed me, and for some reason I knew she was going to try and get herself out of this. The way her foot hovered so close to his chest, and the way she kept looking at me said it all.”

“I closed my eyes tightly, clenching my fist in my lap. I just wanted it all to be over! At that very moment I hated my mother for dying, and blamed her for what my father was doing to us! It wasn’t long until I heard the loud moans of my father from getting kicked in the chest. After that I heard them ruffling around the room, before there was a dead silence. I was so scared to open my eyes… and when I finally did, I wished I never had.”

“Because right before my eyes, laid my si-sister … dead. He didn’t even think twice about it. He just stared at her body, stumbled quickly over it and went into the living room for another drink. I was completely numb from head to toe. My heart was the only part of my entire body that I could actually feel, and it was breaking over and over. I tried to call out for my sister, but the only thing that came out was a soft cry.”

“If it wasn’t for that lady that passed our house on a jog, I would probably be dead. She told the police that she heard a loud commotion going on inside, and thought it would be best if they checked it out. And when they finally came, and saw that my sister was laying dead on the floor, my father was drinking, and I was crying to myself in a corner… he was locked up right on the spot.

I stood, completely lost for words. Inside my heart was breaking over and over again for him. I had no idea he had to go through so much. Every time I tried to say something, nothing would come out.

“I’m sorry Micki. I really never wanted to hurt you. I stayed away from school, because I was too ashamed to even see you. I guess- I guess that when I drank all that alcohol my mind didn’t know what was reality anymore, and who I was anymore.” he cried out, his shirt stained with tears.”The very thing I hated my father for… I did too you… Please can you ever forgive me?”

“Ho-How come you never told me?” Were the only words that my mouth would let escape.
He wiped the tears from his eyes and stated “It’s not something you can just tell someone, Micki! That was a very depressing and hurtful time in my life, that I will never, EVER forget. It haunts my mind everyday. I can never escape the pain I feel for losing so much in such a small amount of time.”

I lowered my head in shame “I’m so sorry Jeremy. I had no idea-“

“Just save it. I’ve heard it all so many times before, I don’t need to hear it from you too. Like I always told you Micki, I know how you feel. I wasn’t far from you. I too have a darkness that never seems to leave me.”

“I-I don’t know what else to say Jeremy. This has been too much for me to take in, I’m sorry, but I really need to go.” I cried, my eyes filling with tears.

“No, wait…” he sighed, touching my arm gently “Please don’t go.”

“Jeremy! I’m not doing this right now. I really need some room to breathe, before I have a break down.” I shouted, pushing him away.

“Okay, but there is just one last thing I really needed to tell you. The whole reason that made what I did a million times worse…” he said softly, his eyes gazing into mine.

He stepped a couple feet towards me, and half-smiled at me. He took me by the arm softly, and pressed his lips carefully onto mine.

I love you…”

Thanks for reading!

It’s official… that was the hardest thing I’ve ever had to write. I hope this chapter makes sense to everyone as to what happened to Jeremy and why he did that to Micki. It’s not his fault… The whole memory of his father and sister, just played over in his head, and the consumption of alcohol, plus what ever else he had the party, separated him from reality. He wasn’t intentionally trying to hurt Micki, it just happened. Plus… Jeremy would never really want to hurt her, because he LOVES her.

Now… how Micki reacts? That’s what the next chapter is for 😉



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214 Responses to Chapter 5.2 – Revealing Secrets


  2. Aw. That was sad… So sad… But when they kissed…
    I fell out of my chair. I love Jeremy, and he’s such a troubled kid.

    • Spongey says:

      Wow really? You really liked it? 🙂 I told everyone it wasn’t his fault :/ He really is troubled and it is sad.

      • I always knew it wasn’t his fault; And guess what? My nightmare was 80% accurate on the chapter! When I read his story I was like, “Whoa! God damn, I must have some damn special powers! :O”

      • Spongey says:

        REALLY!? Okay now that it’s in the open, what was your dream about?

      • Okay, so in my dream, Jeremy was pretty much living a decent life, Kim being his twin sister (one of the wrong parts), and they were just… Normal kids, of course. Then one day their dad came home from a friend’s house and said, “I did a horrible thing…”
        Kim asked her dad what he did, and he responded, “I cheated on your mom… And now I have to kill her.”
        The kids seemed shocked.
        Then it sorta skipped automatically to the worse part.
        Their father started becoming a crazy drunk, and forced the kids to drink the beer, booze, everything. That’s when their father started making them watch him hook up with women, have sex with them, cheat on them with another women, and kill the two women.
        Then one day he started raping Kim while she was sleeping. It became his obsession. One day Kim woke up while he was raping her; She screamed and kicked him in the middle area. She ran from her father, and he chased after her. She had grabbed a small knife, and she had no idea that it was Jeremy that she had hit with the knife; Thankfully it wasn’t in deep and it was on his nose.
        Their father finally just stopped and realized it. He was terribly drunk while this had happened; And he picked up the phone and called the police.
        The police never arrived. Kim and Jeremy killed their father and ran away. People never even noticed their father was gone. They continued their lives on their own.

      • Spongey says:

        Wow that’s really scary! Your right there were parts in it that were true. Like the fact that Jeremy’s father was making him watch him, and he enjoyed it too :/ Poor kids<3 I feel bad that you had to see that in a dream D:

      • Sorry I went into awful detail; It was just how the dream was…

      • It was really a horrifying dream; Especially when Kim was being raped. Like I said, the dream was awfully graphic.

      • Spongey says:

        Wow I’m so glad I didn’t have to see that ;x

      • You should be. My brain will be BURNED FOREVER. D:

  3. plumbobby220 says:

    OH MY GOD! Wow, just wow. I never could have guessed this is what would happen next in poor Micki’s story. I really like the way you wrote it though. When I first saw the warning at the top I almost dreaded reading the chapter. However you gave Jeremy’s story the meaning that I imagine you wanted but it wasn’t too harsh. Great chapter

    • Spongey says:

      Thanks 🙂 Yea it was harsh, but it wasn’t too unbareable. I have to warn people. I let them know to read at their own risk!

      Thank you so much 🙂 It really means a lot!

  4. ChazyBazzy says:

    That was intense! I totally loved it thought. Jeremy has had such a trouble past, it makes me feel real sorry for him.
    Btw hope you don’t mind me asking but what tears did you use and where did you get them? I’ve been looking everywhere but can’t find any

  5. wolfmania98 says:

    D’: SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO depressing :(. Poor Lissy. That dad is a***** ********** ********** ********** ************ **************ing ******************************************…. ‘:( But now that Micki knows.. can she forgive him
    BTW, I was NOT expecting that. I thought he had multiple personality disorder

    • Spongey says:

      I told you guys that no one was close!! 😉 Hm, I think you missed a few ****** and ******ing’s lol xD But your right, that father was horrible and he didn’t care what he did or what happened to himself. Like Jeremy said “His heart turned Black.”

      Hmmm… guess only the next chapter will she what she says 😉

  6. Jedidiah says:

    Oy spooky, I was close wasn’t I?

    It was inevitable for Jeremy to fall for Micks, who would love a dark emo girl 😉 But serious now, you did a great job on this very disturbing topic. Not to say that every villain is a mistreated child at heart, but it makes sense what Jeremy did what he did. Of course, I still condone his actions, and he certainly needs help breaking out of that vicious cycle. I hope Micks parents are able to give her the stability she needs now. As for Kim…I guess there are always friends who don’t know what to say when you are down, so they just say anything, because they feel like they need to say something but they usually make it worse. Hope that Micks don’t suffer from Stockholm syndrome because Jeremy was her friend.

    • Spongey says:

      I told you, you were the closest one. You were right, it was because of something he witnessed. Yea he really does love her. I mean, they grow up together practiacally. Micki meant Jeremy when they were like 11, and now she’s closing in on her adult years! It’s true, it’s hard to think of him as anything different because what he did was still terrible. He feels so bad for it, and he honestly needs some kind of help to get him out of it. Yea of course! They are always there for their kids. That’s why they were hurt that Micki never told them. They always wanted their kids to feel like they could tell them everything.

      Aha, yea, Kim wasn’t that big of a help. She tried, but just made things worse.

      Yea I hope she doesn’t either… but … I guess only time will tell. 😉

      • Jedidiah says:

        I guess something like that is not the easiest thing to tell your parents. But here’s hoping her family will cheer her up. Oh, and of course I meant to write, who wouldn’t love a dark emo girl… o_O

        PS, there’s more for you read LOL XD

      • Spongey says:

        *Squeee!* Cause I’m totally out of things to read! My list died last night with finishing up reading the newest Different Rain chapter ;_; I felt sad as I read it cause my never ending list of stories is gone. Lol Keep writing stuffz Jed!! 😀

        Yea it really isn’t 😦 I’m sure they can! Ha ha I knew what you meant 😉

  7. jaec52609 says:

    i had tears runnin down my cheek as i read read about jeremy…..poor jeremy…..i wouldnt kno wat 2 do in mickis position….i would be torn… glad micki tld fray nd scott everything she been hiddin……..maybe her nightmares have sum thin 2 do wit jeremys past…maybe she’s lissy recarnated…..

    oh srry about deletin torn hearts, it wouldnt save nd when i went 2 restart the entire game was gone…i was so mad i was ready 2 throw the computer down the basement stairs……i might start a different story when my mind is clear nd new ideas come 2 mind

    • Spongey says:

      I noticed you did that! I was about to read it and then I was like 😦 aw she deleted it. Hopefully your computer will stop being a butt. Lol

      Aw sorry!! I didn’t wanna make you cry. I just had to tell it so everyone understands Jeremy. If I was Micki I would be torn too.

  8. sariechiny says:

    Aww…that was so sad)’: I feel so sorry for Jeremy now…
    Woww…was it really last chapter that I thought that Jeremy was a real jerk? Geez, I change my mind fast xP
    That was so sweet when Jeremy kissed Micki<3 I just hope that she'll take it okay…:P
    This chapter was so good!!!(: It might've been hard to write, but in my mind it was well worth it(:

  9. jeremina5 says:

    Micki is going to be an awesome heiress. I was very proud of her for realizing running away wouldn’t change anything.
    Jeremy had it bad…wow. I am curious to see how Micki reacts. One one hand he is her friend,cute, and truly sorry for what he did. On the other hand, he has some major issues. Would he act like that again? Would she spend the rest of her life walking on egg shells, to avoid him going berserk?
    Looking forward to next chapter!

    Also, I am thinking of starting another story. I have a teaser chapter up, of you have a chance to read it. 🙂

    • Spongey says:

      Sure just give me a link ^_^ ❤

      It's so true. She has such a big descion to make, and it's really not an easy one! Jeremy does have a lot of issues, but he also loves Micki very much. So torn..

  10. marissa3 says:

    Oh no! This chapter was awful but really, really good at the same time, I couldn’t stop reading, my mouth was hanging open, my coffee frozen in my hand… so good!
    That dad is a complete asshole! Poor, poor Lissy. I feel so sorry for Jeremy but there’s still a part of my mind that’s screaming ‘THAT’S NO EXCUSE FOR WHAT YOU DID TO MICKI!!!’ I’m still not sure how I feel about Jeremy, he’s gone through the worst experience imaginable but what if it happens again? What if he snaps?!

    • Spongey says:

      Exactly! There is just so many confusing emotions going on. How could Micki choose?! That’s why she said she needed to get away from him because she felt like it was too much information at one time. She really needed time to think, and then he went and kissed her .-.

  11. Rainie92 says:

    It was so sad I don’t want to toture him now I want to give him ha huge hug. I really really hope she forgives him they would make a good cuple she just needs to forget the past and think of the future. I loved it ( seems like I say that everytime) of yea and next chapter it up I stuck to my deadline for once 😀

    • She can forget and forgive, as them being together show the sign of forgiveness. I’d forgive him too, if he nearly raped me.

    • Spongey says:

      I know it’s pretty sad for what had happened to him 😦 Yea it would be nice if she did, but that’s just so much… Who know’s what she’ll say!

      Sweet 😀 And thanks so much!

      • I’d totally still ship them even after all they went through. Life hurts, and I’ve learned you need to get over it like getting over how much it hurts to take band-aids off.
        I’ve been cheated on by a guy several times but those are his mistakes and I’m getting over them and we’ve kept our relationship for a year now. I don’t know why, but it’s easy for me to heal and get over things within three hours.

      • Spongey says:

        Yea, but something like what happened to Micki? Plus she has trust issues… it’s hard to get inside her heart. Which makes it even more heart breaking for the ones she did let in to hurt her.

      • Ah, the trust issues. Now I see how hard it’s going to be.
        I never saw Micki and Jeremy as a sort of brother sister relationship, so I’m hoping they’ll be together. They both have troubles… But my main concern is… And Micki’s would be in the future, too, “What if Jeremy rapes her again?” I mean, Jeremy isn’t the type of guy who would stop doing something even if it were bad, which means he could start up the drinks again, and it could be a living hell for Micks.

      • Spongey says:

        Yea that’s the part where it will get tricky for her. That’s why I said she’s really going to have to think this through very well.

      • Jeremy should be thinking too; I am now thinking he has made a huge mistake to kiss Micki. I love Jeremy and Micki loads, but I think they should take more time to stay away from each other.

      • Spongey says:

        Yea, it’s true. It’s a lot to take in all at once, but he got caught up in the moment of everything. He was pouring his heart out and telling her everything, and that was included in the everything.

      • And if you tell someone something like that, it could really lead to something awful.

      • Spongey says:

        Yea it’s so true :/

  12. Jonas Legacy says:

    Jeremy I honestly feel bad for him. Micki you gotta forgive him he most likely just remembered his father and did the same thing with the acohol and rape. But if he had a life like that and admits he loves her and it was completely accidental she should forgive him but will she? Oh and how do you make the picutres black and white on Paint it just makes it black 😛

  13. Jonas Legacy says:

    Thanks, Jackie any confirmation?

    • I don’t think she’s on now. But I think she’ll confirm the photo editor later.

      But she used Picnik for the banner, so I guessed she used Picnik for this.

      • Spongey says:

        Ha ha yuppers 😀

      • Jonas Legacy says:

        Hey Jackie so you do use Picnik? And what do you use to nuzip files because mine expired and it’s tllnig me no more trials 😛 and one last question are those custom poses by you if so they are REALLY good

      • Spongey says:

        LOL! No way I could never make poses, I would mess them up and they would look like barbie dolls xD I just use other poses that are for different things, to work for other scenes.

        Yea I use Picnik. Uhhh I use WinRaR 🙂

  14. Jonas Legacy says:

    Thanks? I thought midnight made her banners.

  15. Morgan says:

    Oh darn there goes my “just a big brother” realtionship lol. But now i feel so bad for Jeremey and what he went through. I wouldnt know what to do if i where in any of there situations (yes i do i would have a nervous break down) i just hope Micki will be ok……. Does Kim know about Jermey’s past since they where friends when he was a kid?

    • Spongey says:

      No, he told Micki he just doesn’t tell anyone that. Nobody outside of his adopted family knows. He told Micki because of what happened, other wise he probably would of hid it forever.

      Ha ha yea no more big bro 😉

  16. peyton224 says:

    AWWWWWWW!!! Sweet,sad,so awsome chapter!I really didnt blame Jeremy,i was just kinda mad.I didnt want to kill him or something ._. Gosh,i feel so sorry for Jeremy.That should NEVER happen to a kid!
    Your such an amazing writer!
    P.S. This chapter=epicness.And epic is MY word.

    • Spongey says:

      Aw, thanks so much Peyton! That really means a lot ^_^

      Yea he really had to go through a lot as a kid :/

      • peyton224 says:

        You know,since this is called “And Then It Rained…”,Its like a storm.The wind is like when there are cliffhangers and we never know where the wind will flow,and the bad events are the rain,and right after the storm,the rainbow comes,which is the happier parts of this storm 🙂

      • Spongey says:

        It’s so true 🙂 That’s why my blog is called “And Then it Rained…” ^_^

  17. elizabeth says:

    Oh man, now I feel terrible about being mean to Jeremy. 😦 I can’t believe that happened. I hope that Micki and his relationship works out. 🙂 Really epic chapter!

  18. How can someone take the most depressing stories and turn them into pure drama gold?! I’m serious! I envy your writing skills! 🙂
    Wow, I knew Jeremy had some problems but, wow! Awwwww, My heart just lifted when they kissed at the end 😀 I think they make a cute couple 🙂
    I hope that they get together, But with you there is NO telling what could happen! I can guess, but it’s never even close! And that is why I am hooked on your story!!!!! ARGH! Must read more!!!! *Nervous tick* 🙂
    And now the guess work starts again, because I can honestly say, I have NO clue where this is going! I can only get on the ride and see where it takes me, and by the end, I will be squealing with excitement 😀 Really, I don’t mind what you write about or who you write about, as long as your the one writing it 😀

    • Spongey says:

      Aw thanks so much. That’s such a sweet thing to say :’). I’m so happy to hear that you enjoy my writing!! I try my very best to make my chapters good 🙂

      Don’t worry I’ll be working on another chapter soon 😉

  19. Elocine says:

    I think you did an amazing job at portraying a really, really dark subject in a manner that didn’t downplay the severity or gloss overt the gritty details. It definitely wasn’t easy to read, but I really, really love the depth of you stories. I can’t wait to see where this goes from here!

  20. Deanna says:

    Awesome chapter! I knew that Jeremy would explain why he had the scar in this chapter. =3

    Gosh, I feel so bad for Jeremy…. Having to witness all that at a young age can be horrible. People that go through that normally exhibit signs of Post Traumatic Stress Disorder. XD Ah, I’ve lived through two people in my family having PTSD and someone else being depressed, so I can really sympathize with Micki and Jeremy. XD

    • Spongey says:

      Yea it was not an easy thing for poor Jeremy to go through. First his mother dying, then his father treating them like garbage, and then him losing all hope in life, and not giving a crap about anyone. Then… well you know the rest :/

      Thanks glad you still enjoyed it! 🙂

  21. SimLover0510 says:

    One word…. AMAZING

  22. Tawny says:

    I really enjoyed this chapter. I can’t say i was crying or anything like that like some other people were, but for good reason. It was super late at night and my mom went into the kitchen which is right next to our office and i was trying so hard not to make any noise while i read this chapter.

    I feel like I’m the only one that still does’t like Jeremy. If it was me personally I would still shove him away regardless of his past. He could get so out of control if he drank again and I really hope that Micki doesn’t take that chance again. She already has enough pain in her life as is.

    Jeremy’s story was depressing and I felt bad for him but I still blame him for his actions. Yes it was a party. Yes your supposed to have fun and let loose, but it was his fault that he started drinking. But I still think he’s cute ^^

    • Spongey says:

      Ha ha I loved how you said all that, then ended with I still think he’s cute xD That made me laugh. Yea it’s true, and I let everyone stand by their opinions 🙂 I don’t agree with Jeremy but I don’t hate him. It’s really up to Micki on what choice she makes in this situation.

  23. Callie says:

    oh my god. words cannot even. waaaah!!
    this was all so terribly sad, and terrifying! the action practically leapt off the screen into my mind it was so vivid. (yeah… great analogy callie…)
    anyway, i’d like this to be a “and then they lived happily ever after” moment buuut seeing as we’re only 2 chapters in, I have a feeling that’s not the case ^_~ I dread to think what you have planned, girl, but I’m sure it’ll be awesome!! ♥

    • Spongey says:

      Thanks so much Callie!! 😀 It always means a lot to hear you enjoyed it ^_^ ❤ Well, gee, I didn't know I made it that vivid 😀

      Ha ha, I know. Were only 2 chapters in… now way that's how I'm gonna end it 😉 You know me all too well.


  24. Brennon says:

    This is a great legacy. I knew he was going to say he loved her. I think it would be so cool if they ended up together. They’ll tell their kids, “Well, after your father apologized for raping me, we just fell in love.” It’s gonna be great.

    • Spongey says:

      XD oh my god that made me laugh so hard!! XD Even if that did happen, I don’t ever think the words “rape” and “your mother”, would come up in a conversation XD

      Thanks! 😀 I’m glad you enjoy it

  25. jayluvsu says:

    omg i hav so many questions!
    so here r my questions:
    how do u make ur sims tears actually show on their face?
    how cn ur sims get in realistic positions?
    how did jerem’s mom get in a car crash? do u like have an expansion pack to make them die in a car crash?
    thnx in the future i luv ur legacy.

    • Spongey says:

      1. It’s a custom makeup. I downloaded it from a site. I gave the link to someone else in these comments. 🙂 Just see who it was 😀
      2. It’s from poses. I download a pose player from mod the sims, then I download custom poses.
      3.No. I just said she died in a car crash for story purposes.

      Thanks so much! 😉

  26. Amy says:

    Aww, he’s a cuuuutie. Micki (I keep wanting to type Mickie, hehe) is a lucky girlie.
    Buuuut, I really wish that was the end of it and they will live together forever and ever in Neverland but, it’s chapter 2. This is not the end of it. And after reading your saying I can tell that their is some drama coming! hehe!
    Loved the chapter though, all I could say was O.o then u.u then <3.<3 Well done Jackie, well done ❤

  27. Emy says:

    That was so saad. Poor poor Jeremy. I was totally off, but hey, I like your explanation better. 🙂 Well… I don’t, because it was horrible, but you know what I mean. Poor thing. D: Sad about his sister, too.

    Somehow I don’t think that Fraser and Scott will be too happy if those two start to date, though. XD

    • Spongey says:

      Your so right about that. I wouldn’t think they would even let her 100 feet near him, if she did. Yea it was sad :/ But Jeremy had to get his point across. 😦

  28. Liza says:

    Ohhhh poor Jeremy! ;(

    And I totally agree with Emy, do not think Fraser and Scott will be happy.

  29. nahshona says:

    Okay, here’s my honest opinion, I hope Micki finds a gentle way to let Jeremy down. I’m all for forgive and forget but that is easier said than done, especially in a case like this. I’m not so sure Micki would even want to be his friend let alone feel romantic feelings for him. Then again she was really concerned about him when he didn’t show up for school, maybe she just needed an explanation as to why he had done what he did. Now that he has explained, I think she can move on with her life. I don’t know that there is enough time in the world to get over something like that. I know someone who was involved in a situation where a relative tried to force himself on her and she is still haunted by the memories. This person told another family member whom she trusted and that family member told the relative off. It wasn’t as serious as Micki’s case, but something like that just doesn’t go away with time. I think that Micki should find someone else. Mainly someone who doesn’t remind her of the pain and darkness she is going through. She should find someone who could possibly bring her out of the darkness and into the light.

    I feel bad for Jeremy, but I don’t think Micki is the one for him. He went through something that no child should ever have to and that was bad enough. And then to lose the only other person in the world that he could trust and that he knew loved him unconditionally hurt him to no end. He deserves to be happy just like anyone else, but the first step in the process is to admit that he has a problem and then seek help. It’s often hard to admit when a person has a problem because of all the negative labels that come with it. People can be so judgmental sometimes and all before they know the whole story. It really grinds my gears.

    And now that I’ve practically typed an essay on your page 😛 , I’d like to say sorry for the extra long comment, but this is what happens when I come across something that I feel passionately about. If you see more essays on your wall in the future from me, you’ll know that it was a really extraordinary chapter and this one was! This was very nicely written so hats off to you as it is not easy to write about such difficult situations so eloquently. Let me wrap all of this up by saying well done and I can’t wait for the next one! 🙂

    • Spongey says:

      You have touched base to many, and very important points. Maybe Jeremy isn’t the one for her. What he did was beyond anyone’s forgiveness, and even beyond Micki’s. She has trouble letting people in because of how anti-social she can be. And to be hurt by the one who was suppose to keep her safe, and stay her best friend? It hurts her even more than normal. Because she trusted him. Jeremy has a very serious issue, that is no where near his fault. Your so right about that, and judgeing people before you know them,

      It’s super fine. I love long comments anyways. Sorry if my reply sounds off. I’m sick and I’m so light headed 😦 Thanks for the support though! I’m so glad that you enjoyed the chapter, and thought I did a good job. It makes me feel better on one of my down days.

      -Sponge ❤

  30. elizabeth says:

    I’m sooo excited for the next update! :d

  31. nahshona says:

    Sorry to hear you’re feeling bad 😦 I hope you feel better soon 🙂

  32. Liza says:

    Ohhh, you’re sick! 😦

    I feel like a bucket of dog crap also…

  33. Jedidiah says:

    Oh hey I read you’re feeling sick? Aww! *must do something*

    • Spongey says:

      Yea 😦 I’m not feeling so great. Been in my bed, and trying to sleep it off.

      Well, you can always make a new chapter.. that always makes me feel better ;P <3<3

      • Jedidiah says:

        Oh how I love the way you drop gossamer hints… :p I might not get to those chapters as soon as I’d like, but I’ll have the next best thing… wait for it…wait for it….

      • Spongey says:

        What’s the next best thing?! Don’t leave me hanging! Lol.

        Who me? Drop hints? ;P Would I ever do that? <3<3

  34. Just a fair warning to everyone:

    Don’t install the new update. It sucks. .-.

  35. Oh and Sponge I got some info about Pets, and before you install the Pets Patch you have to uninstall all your CC. :/

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